216-word version:
...You see, though I was born and raised in Korea throughout my life, I had the very fortunate opportunity to visit the United States while I was contemplating about college plans as my sister was a student in Cornell University...

249-word version:
Although I was born and raised in Korea throughout my life, I had the very fortunate opportunity to visit the United States while I was contemplating about college plans as my sister was a student in Cornell University...

378-word version:
Just as misguided my purpose had been at first volunteering for the 재단명 Rehabilitation Center, so had been my objective of wanting to go to college. During high school, I was involved in a lot of volunteer activities...