158-word version:
During my freshman year, I participated in the Korea Mock Trial Competition as the witness for our hodgepodge team...

164-word version:
During my freshman year, I participated in the Korea Mock Trial Competition as the witness for our hodgepodge team. Although our team lost pitiably on its debut, enthralled by the entire trial process, I...wanted to create an official mock trial club...

212-word version:
...Although our team lost pitiably on its debut, enthralled by the entire trial process, I initially wanted to create an official mock trial club not so much to share the experience with “associates” of similar enthusiasm but to win competitions...