465-word version:
...As a child, I preferred watching TV or playing computer games to hiking. So I always complained about hiking, but it eventually grew on me as my father’s friends, unbeknown to them that it was rather a therapy for me, encouraged me with their compliments that I was more consistent in the sport than any one of their children, whom they had constantly tried to cajole with the benefits of hiking to no avail...

465-word version:
My family has had a tremendous impact on my life. Even though I am an only child, I was taught to always share with and consider the feelings of others by living with my four cousins. My relatives gather to celebrate holidays and watch Korean soccer games and these continuous gatherings have allowed me to understand the importance of relationships, to enjoy others’ sense of humor, and to become a well-rounded person...