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Hello, my name is 필자이름.

I sincerely thank you for accepting me as a member of the 2017 class. It is an honor to be able to spend the most important time of my life at 대학명. I am so excited about the acceptance that I have already made up my mind to become a member of this prestigious community, but the financial problem concerns me.

As you may know, I applied for a financial aid and was accepted with $34,500/yr (including loan). However, when I shared this great news with my parents, they said that they were slightly burdened to support my full education for four years, which may cost up to nearly $50,000 only on tuition and boarding. And, if I calculate other costs such as airfare and books and other expenses, it will be estimably $58,500 per year...

Best regards,
필자이름